Haejin Kim's Request (05 Jul 2019)

Good afternoon, I am writing an essay for my ENGL 1102 class, and I would like to request feedback on my draft. Our prompt was to choose a short story or poem from the textbook and ask/answer our own question regarding its character, setting, theme, or artistic qualities. The story I chose was The Things They Carried by Tim O'Brien, and my thesis is "through repetition, the author creates a straightforward catalog of objects that the soldiers carry and use that list symbolically in order to solidify the personalities and characteristics of each individual." Aside from general feedback, I specifically would like help on some areas: Do you have any suggestions for transitions? I want to make smooth transitions throughout my essay but I feel like the ones I have now sound too formulaic. Is there any point in the paper where I am tangential from the thesis? Thank you so much for your help
ENGL 1102

submitted: Jul 05, 2019
responded: Jul 07, 2019
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  • Maria Batty (admin)
    July 7, 2019, 2:37 p.m.

    Dear Haejin, Thank you for writing to Athena, but you forgot to attach your essay. Please send it along. Thanks!

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