Alexis Bailey's Request (22 Nov 2018)

Please review my paper and send it to this email address. I cannot access my student email. It's a peer review requirement that I need for a grade in this class. The paper is argumentative and persuasive. I need to make sure that I have followed all MLA guidelines with clear the opening statement, three or more topics with support, proper MLA citations and sources and anything else that you may find within the document. Sincerely, Alexis Bailey
ENGL 1101

submitted: Nov 22, 2018
responded: Nov 26, 2018
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  • Maria Batty (admin)
    Nov. 26, 2018, 9:27 a.m.

    Dear Dayanna, Thank you for sending your essay to Athena. This essay seems more informative than persuasive. Also, it does not have a formal academic tone. You should not use 1st or 2nd person or contractions. Your thesis statement should not be questions; it should provide an essay map for the paper. You should not use long quotes (four lines or more), and you should not begin or end paragraphs with quotes but instead always with your own words. You have many grammatical errors such as fragments and comma splices. Your in-text citations are incorrect, as is your Works Cited page (you should not be copying the MLA heading as part of your citation). I hope you find these comments helpful. If you don't understand how to organize your paper around a thesis statement or how to recognize and correct the types of errors I’ve mentioned, come into a lab to work with a tutor face to face, or post specific questions here on Athena. Also, handouts are available at Click on Handouts on the left, and then Grammar and Writing Handouts. Good luck! If you have a moment, please cut and paste this address into your browser, and take our survey. Thanks!

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