Gabrielle Brewer's Request (26 Nov 2018)

I would like a review and any help please on my final essay for my English 1102 class. It's an essay about Amy Tan's "Two Kinds", and I'm using the psychological/psychoanalytical approach to show that since Jing-Mei was a child, she could've used hyperbole and exaggeration in her descriptions of her mother's behavior. Any advice and help would be great! Thank you! God Bless! -Gabrielle (Gabbie) Brewer.
ENGL 1102

submitted: Nov 26, 2018
responded: Nov 27, 2018
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  • Maria Batty (admin)
    Nov. 27, 2018, 1:18 p.m.

    Dear Gabrielle, Thank you for sending your essay to Athena. I’m not really sure what kind of essay it’s supposed to be. It’s not really a literary analysis; it seems to be much more about children’s language. For all your explanations and definitions of hyperbole, you don’t give much insight about it and its meaning to the story, except to say that probably Jing-Mei is exaggerating. What meaning does that have for the story? What about the end of the story, when Jing-Mei is an adult? She recognizes the motives behind her mother’s behavior; does she realize anything about her own? You should avoid contractions and passive constructions such as “it can be seen” or “it is said.” Your Works Cited entries need to start with last name first. If there are two authors, they both get mentioned in-text (Clifford-Poston and Roberts). You are using a lot of quotes and not enough of your own words. Again, the paper seems to be more about people and children in general and less about “Two Kinds.” I hope you find these comments helpful. If you don't understand how to organize your paper around a thesis statement or how to recognize and correct the types of errors I’ve mentioned, come into a lab to work with a tutor face to face, or post specific questions here on Athena. Also, handouts are available at Click on Handouts on the left, and then Grammar and Writing Handouts. Good luck! If you have a moment, please cut and paste this address into your browser, and take our survey. Thanks!

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