Jenna Mock's Request (28 Nov 2018)

need help with editing and revising this persuasive paper
ENGL 1101

submitted: Nov 28, 2018
responded: Nov 29, 2018
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  • Maria Batty (admin)
    Nov. 29, 2018, 9:47 a.m.

    Dear Jenna, Thank you for sending your paper to Athena. It seems more informative than persuasive or argumentative. You can find a handout on how to structure an argumentative essay at Click on Handouts on the left, and then Grammar and Writing Handouts. A basic template for a persuasive essay is something like this: Although some people think _____, in fact ________ because _______, _________, and ______. Or: Some people think _____, but in fact _______, _________, and ______. A persuasive essay needs to take a position. You need to read this paper carefully. You frequently confuse the terms “mental health” and “mental illness,” which really destroys your credibility. You need in-text citations and a Works Cited page. You should not use 1st or 2nd person or contractions. I notice subject-verb agreement errors and pronoun-antecedent agreement errors. I hope you find these comments helpful. If you don't understand how to organize your paper around a thesis statement or how to recognize and correct the types of errors I’ve mentioned, come into a lab to work with a tutor face to face, post specific questions here on Athena, or refer to our handouts. Good luck! If you have a moment, please cut and paste this address into your browser, and take our survey. Thanks!

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