Ariel Beasley's Request (22 Apr 2019)

I would like to see if there are any errors in my essay. How to include in-text citations and avoid being repetitive.
ENGL 1102

submitted: Apr 22, 2019
responded: Apr 22, 2019
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  • Maria Batty (admin)
    April 22, 2019, 2:05 p.m.

    Dear Ariel, Thank you for sending your essay to Athena. You don’t include the professor’s instructions, so I don’t know if you’re answering the prompt. Errors include lack of formal academic tone (contractions, 1st and 2nd person, “Yes,” “Well,” ”Believe it or not,” exclamation points); rhetorical questions; capitalization; pronoun-antecedent agreement; subject-verb agreement; fragments; comma splices; awkward constructions (“The main reason being why is because…”); passive voice; and a complete lack of citations. Any time you quote words or provide a statistic, you must provide at the end of the sentence an in-text citation in (I assume) MLA 8 format: (Smith 256), say, where Smith is the author and 256 is the page number. I’ve attached a handout with more detailed instructions. The fast food discussion seems off-topic; you don’t refer to it in your thesis statement. What are the other healthier options that are more expensive than seafood? I hope you find these comments helpful. If you don't understand how to organize your paper around a thesis statement or how to recognize and correct the types of errors I’ve mentioned, come into a lab to work with a tutor face to face (we have five locations), or post specific questions here on Athena. Also, handouts are available at https://success.students.gsu.edu/ltc. Click on Handouts on the left, and then Grammar and Writing Handouts. Good luck! If you have a moment, please cut and paste this address into your browser, and take our survey. Thanks! https://gsu.qualtrics.com/jfe/form/SV_1SlyViJ6skhPJcN

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