Samantha Roberts's Request (25 Apr 2019)

Hello, I need help in making sure my thesis is clearly stated and that I have enough evidence to support it. This is my rough draft that I am attaching, so any assistance will be appreciated. I would like to ensure that the paragraph transition properly. I have included the instructions for the essay as well. Thank you Essay Instructions: Suggestion: Select your preferred essay. Then choose a good idea from your topic sentences within that essay to write another new critical or structuralist essay in more depth. OR examine the content you included in your introduction and conclusion paragraphs to see if you’re interested in writing in a biographical, social, historical, psychological, or other literary critique format. Requirements: Focus/Purpose: to analyze and to support an opinion to a primary audience of classmates and instructor and a secondary audience of scholars Content and Support/Elaboration: Your 6+ paragraph essay should be 600-700 words. Each paragraph should include concrete details from the literature as support for the topic sentence, either as an example or an explanation of your point. Each body paragraph should contain research. Idea Organization: Create complete paragraphs (topic, supporting details, transitions) organized as needed to support your ideas in your chosen critique format. Style: Third person writing is required. College-level academic formality is expected as well. Format/Essay Conventions: You may organize this critique in an argument essay structure to support your unique view on the literature. MLA: This essay must conform to 8th edition MLA standards. This includes the heading, the page formatting, the in-text citations, and the full citations after the essay. You will incorporate more research material into your essay in MLA format than you have in prior essays, but the focus of the essay is your argument for your analysis, so the research material should only support your points. Research: THIS ESSAY DOES REQUIRE ADDITIONAL RESEARCH and has ADDITIONAL RESEARCH ASSIGNMENTS. For the final draft, you should have 5 specialized sources in addition to your chosen work(s) of literature for 6 sources minimum on your works cited list. All sources must be cited in proper MLA format throughout the essay and on your Works Cited page.
ENG 1102

submitted: Apr 25, 2019
responded: Apr 25, 2019
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  • Maria Batty (admin)
    April 25, 2019, 10:56 a.m.

    Dear Samantha, Thank you for sending your essay to Athena. MLA format does not put “p.” in the in-text citations, and MLA 8 no longer requires the city of publication for books in Works Cited. Don’t talk about yourself in your formal academic writing. Remember to discuss the poem in present tense: The character chooses or has chosen, not chose. I don’t think you need “upon further review”: Those conditions exist(ed) regardless of how often the poem is read. Your thesis statement should explicitly state your argument (which is quite insightful!) that the mother aborts her children as an expression of love, to spare them the pain of living in a flawed society. Then, in each body paragraph, tie discussion of biography or socioeconomic conditions to lines in the poem that support your argument. I don’t see an in-text citation for Angela Jackson, and her Works Cited entry lacks a journal title. MLA calls it “Works Cited,” not “Bibliography,” and it should always start its own page (insert a page break). If you’re quoting the poem “After School,” you should source it from Brooks or say “qtd. in Flynn.” Is the word “cookies” supposed to be repeated? I hope you find these comments helpful. If you don't understand how to organize your paper around a thesis statement or how to recognize and correct the types of errors I’ve mentioned, come into a lab to work with a tutor face to face (we have five locations), or post specific questions here on Athena. Also, handouts are available at Click on Handouts on the left, and then Grammar and Writing Handouts. Good luck! If you have a moment, please cut and paste this address into your browser, and take our survey. Thanks!

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